tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post2948199165027392672..comments2024-03-07T19:14:17.863-08:00Comments on Songs of Aletheia (The Greek Godess Of TRUTH): Owned By A Cat (Ode To Jezabel)heid2222http://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-55312497563717773612017-11-09T16:35:26.952-08:002017-11-09T16:35:26.952-08:00If I worried about how perfect (which believe me, ...If I worried about how perfect (which believe me, I do) they were so much that I deleted them no one would ever see anything I write. Seriously Shel bell...get those thoughts out there!heid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-35139842948123742732017-11-09T16:34:14.857-08:002017-11-09T16:34:14.857-08:00Thanks Shel... :)Thanks Shel... :)heid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-45750686238724762392017-11-09T16:33:29.422-08:002017-11-09T16:33:29.422-08:00She was quite the little hunter in her youth... sh...She was quite the little hunter in her youth... she would bring them ALIVE into the house.THAT was CRAZY :Pheid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-58417421519330696872017-11-05T08:19:52.002-08:002017-11-05T08:19:52.002-08:00I love the part about her pulling birds from the s...I love the part about her pulling birds from the sky.Shelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12483411868850709026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-81493056884790775352017-11-05T08:19:10.929-08:002017-11-05T08:19:10.929-08:00So beautiful. So beautiful. Shelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12483411868850709026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-17582815242580420662017-11-05T08:17:40.114-08:002017-11-05T08:17:40.114-08:00Oops, I had started out about the mental disorders...Oops, I had started out about the mental disorders because I was going to say I would write so many things and then worry about how perfect they were then, burning all of them. Really wish I never done that for anythingShelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12483411868850709026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-85872810270102304422017-11-05T08:16:48.038-08:002017-11-05T08:16:48.038-08:00I have several mental disorders. I used to write a...I have several mental disorders. I used to write a lot. I would not change anything. I'm a True Believer and grabbing your thoughts and words directly from the spontaneity of the heartbeat within you. The only word if it was mine would be replacing haunt with a sentence incorporating the word besieged.Shelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12483411868850709026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-73698858716911453612017-08-14T17:45:16.968-07:002017-08-14T17:45:16.968-07:00Anyways, thanks for your thoughts...I've alway...Anyways, thanks for your thoughts...I've always considered you quite the amazing wordsmith! :) Any other thoughts let me know...heid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-5896705167739990652017-08-14T15:27:16.011-07:002017-08-14T15:27:16.011-07:00And Lucy sounds like she was a character...And Lucy sounds like she was a character...heid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-45832533294192377722017-08-14T15:26:35.458-07:002017-08-14T15:26:35.458-07:00You and I are on the same wavelength...I did chang...You and I are on the same wavelength...I did change it...but a little different this time "I am in love with a creature<br />Who wakes me with hairballs<br />Running around the house at night<br />Attacker of toilet paper rolls and socks<br />"A small dragon that slays mice<br />Who pulls birds from the sky<br />To lay them at my feet" Or would it be better to keep it shorter like I had it before...hmmmmmheid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-17409230556409285102017-08-14T13:32:02.321-07:002017-08-14T13:32:02.321-07:00Lucy used to get me up anywhere between 2:30 and 4...Lucy used to get me up anywhere between 2:30 and 4:30. It got to the point that when I noticed her starting to stir (whether she got up right away or not), I knew I would have to get up soon. Otherwise, she would sit and stare at me until I did.<br /><br />How about "slaying dragons (that are mice)"?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05080084064016872067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-3994003976928071002017-08-14T03:51:54.546-07:002017-08-14T03:51:54.546-07:00Oh one other thought Kevin..."And she slays d...Oh one other thought Kevin..."And she slays dragons that are mice" or "she thinks shes a dragon who slays mice" I wonder which sounds better? Anybody have thoughts on that one?<br /><br />On a funny and kind of sweet note....Jez used to always wake me up around 2 or 3 am to try to get me to feed her. Its 3:30 am. This time when I woke up something told me to name this poem "Ode To A Cat" (I named it Ode To My Cat- but I may change ti back to "Ode To A Cat" which sounds better? heid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-8602515645074172582017-08-13T18:02:58.170-07:002017-08-13T18:02:58.170-07:00Thanks for your advice Kevin..❤️. I'lllook at...Thanks for your advice Kevin..❤️. I'lllook at it again Monday ... heid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-22820786462756670562017-08-13T16:39:55.601-07:002017-08-13T16:39:55.601-07:00The "winner" part just means having comp...The "winner" part just means having completed the half-marathon. Apparently, lots of folks who sign up for either form of the marathon (half or full), end up not completing it. That's why I signed up for the half-marathon—so I could sleep (though I barely stayed awake as it was).<br /><br />As for your poem, my main suggestion would be to number (or otherwise separate) the two halves—with the split coming after either "Sharpening claws on me" (where you stop addressing her directly) or the last line of that stanza.<br /><br />Also, perhaps split up parts of the last stanza for added impact. At least, I think the last couple of lines could stand alone as the final stanza. Plus, if it were me, I'd be tempted to try it without "all my life", replacing it with an ellipsis (…) instead (I do like my ellipses!). (And add quotation marks to (or italicize) "Help me".)<br /><br />But I don't think I'd change anything else beyond whatever polishing you would normally do.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05080084064016872067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-24542382598750447172017-08-12T04:22:18.799-07:002017-08-12T04:22:18.799-07:00You actually just brought back a funny memory. Jez...You actually just brought back a funny memory. Jez would sleep between my knees, but between Joes (my huz) too. Same problem (she would complain mightily if he had to get up during the night) then, when he came back, she would be sitting in his place (whether it was day or night.) EVERY time. Joe would get this look of love on his face every time, despite what she had done, and say feigning annoyance (ok, maybe sometime he was a little annoyed but it was cute how he would treat her. He'd say "heeeeeey..thats my spot.. and she would look at him like "NO...you left...its my spot now. Deal with it." lol <br /><br />heid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-51737716962060337952017-08-12T04:15:10.411-07:002017-08-12T04:15:10.411-07:00Your cats sound sweet. And Awww...toys :) I think ...Your cats sound sweet. And Awww...toys :) I think its hilarious when cats suddenly just go NUTS. Hairballs will never be forgotten...especially when you step in them. Cats are so funny. They just kind of...take you over. Your heart is never the same. You can't help but fall in love. Any advice or things you would change in the poem? I have been checking periodically on your poems, your 12 hour stint...man!A poem an hour! Saw that you were with the winners...doesn't surprise me at all. Your poems are epic! (seriously) I just haven't signed up for the site or I would have commented... because of you I just might one of these days...heid2222https://www.blogger.com/profile/00926118391028496062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8166260842278672814.post-15435029095336040102017-08-11T22:56:18.109-07:002017-08-11T22:56:18.109-07:00Ah, blankets and hairballs! Lucy had this habit of...Ah, blankets and hairballs! Lucy had this habit of settling down between my knees, so when I woke up unprompted at, say, 2:30 in the morning, I would be unable to move—and, unlike during the day, she was not so easily budged from her chosen spot. Both cats would occasionally wake me with hairballs—in fact, Trixie still does (though I now manage to stay just asleep enough to not be startled out of bed right away). Neither cat ever went for the toilet paper, but Lucy had three or four plush toys she would carry around from place to place—still have those…Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05080084064016872067noreply@blogger.com